Nice concept but no deaths
Deaths in fighting scenes is important! When that happens, you'll know who loses and who doesn't. I see your trying to create a series out of this.. the story is a little low... their should be more explination into it. One more thing, I noticed the white was a female and the black was a male... when did atoms have genders? The female seemed to kick ass.. now I know your probably a female without looking at your profile. Good luck on your series.